My favorite place from my childhood is the lake my family goes to every summer. I have memories that I will even forget from there. I love fishing with my cousin and his kids. I also enjoy riding on the boat or skiing across the lake. Even to this day its still is my favorite place the visit.
Concept:
ReplyDeleteGeometric in nature, almost abstract...very interesting. What's so amazing is that the drawings absolutely evoke a mood and sense of place, but they are not showing us the true content. Which is the best part for me!
There is a privacy in both the line and design as well as a direct representation; We don't see the inside of your apartment, literally, because that's the point. You've earned a private space and you're keeping it that way. I love that the blinds are drawn.
And the summer spot image carries the same theme, in that this image could be almost anyplace. Without the narrative, we'd be lost...no point of reference. There's no imagery of the things you mentioned you like to do there...they are kept private. Which is great! Even if unintentional, it's a really interesting way to set tone and mood...and story!
With animation, you could explore these spaces through movement and reveal through ambient audio the sounds of people fishing or boating or cooking-out without ever actually having to see them. All the action could be off screen and you could just animate the quiet beauty of spaces like these. Something you could never do in a static image. I can't wait to see these move next week!
Composition:
There is a pattern-like, almost geometric quality to both drawings. The settings are sparse and a little safe. With the apartment drawing being the most "intense" in terms of line weight and passion.
Detail/execution:
I think both drawings could benefit from more overall tonality. Contrast and shading would fill in for some of the lack of detail. There's no law that says texture must be present in all images, but it is present in the world. And, everything has tone, whether black and white or color.
All texture and tone do is send signals to the brain that say, "this feels like something...this can/could be touched..this light is familiar to my experience." Which, when you're watching a film serves to draw you in even further. You know you can't touch it/feel it and that it doesn't really even exist, but it's the subconscious response to detail, depth and texture that helps create a stronger bond with the illusion of film (within the mind of the viewer).
What I love about your drawings is that they have so much potential in terms of substituting major textural detail with really well articulated representation of light. There is a really strong sense of light and time of day in the apartment drawing especially. With a little more definition, it would really start to breath. There is a haunting quality about the summer house drawing...but I feel like it's at least missing shadows.
Following instruction:
Pretty good...just stay on top of deadlines!
I do think that just a little bit more time spent with both these drawings would have paid off even greater.
Good job overall.